30.1.2006
Preeti : hey baby! Aaj maine pallao banaya. Its yummy! Miss u L - DELETE
24.7.2006
Preeti: Miss u – DELETE
26.7.2006
Preeti: u r the man. With whom I wanna spent my rest of my life.luv u . muaaaaah! – DELETE
15. 9.2006
Preeti: muaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah! Luv u baby J - DELETE
28. 9 .2006
Preeti: yesterday night was gud. I felt like I m a part of u. muuuuah!- DELETE
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ROHAN: maa main baal katwaane jaa raha hun…
Naai ki dukaan mein bhir hone ke kaaran usse intezaar karna padta hai. Tabhi uska phone baj uth ta hai
ROHAN:haan bhai, …….nai…oh acha… messages delete karne padenge memory full ho gaya hai …..haan ok Friday done…
Rohan apni phone ke messages mita raha tha,…
10.4.2007
Preeti: wanna tell u something, u shud knw. I don’t feel for u anymore. I can’t explain. But yeah…..
Rohan message padte hi do mahine purani baatein uske kaan mein bajni shuru ho jati hai
ROHAN: what the fuck are u saying? you must be kidding right?
PREETI: no I am serious. I don’t know I just stopped loving you. please don’t ask me, why. We are not right for each other.. I suppose
ROHAN: what crap? Itne din baad tumhe yeh sab lag raha hai aur hamarei future plans? unka kya?
PREETI: please don’t make it tough for me. Please understand. Matlab pata nahi… I don’t feel like talking to you. Pata nahi I can’t explain…. Hummein bahaut jhagre hote …pata nahi ..may be
ROHAN: jhagre. Kaunse relationship mein nahi hota hai, cmon, we can talk, ……………….. Or you have started seeing somebody?
PREETI: No not as of now…. par
Naai ke do baar pukaarne ke baad Rohan hosh mein aata hai aur baal kaatne ke kursi mein jaa bhaitha hai . Saamne lage sheeshe par Rohan ke aankhein laal aur num nazar aa rahein the. Tabhi naai baal kaatne se pehle radio chaalu kar deta hai.
RADIO: agle gaane ke farmaish aayi hai Raju bijnor se, Karan dilli se…….. film ka naam Dev D…....
Song: Nayan Tarse, Nayan Tarse
Taras Na Mile, Nayan Tarse
Nayan Tarse, Nayan Tarse
Daras na mile, Nayan Tarse
Dono Se Bahe Dhaar, Nayan Tarse
Haare Yeh, Path Nihar
Nayan Tarse, Nayan Tarse
NAAI: sahaab oh sahaab baal kitne chothe karoon?
ROHAN: saare baal kaat de, ek bhi baal sar pe nahi hone chahiye.
Bisar Gaye Bisar Gaye Kitne
Bisar Gaye Bisar Gaye Kitne
Biraha Mein jal jal, Pal Woh Gaye Badal
Swaha Swaha swaha……….
Rohan wapas ghar aate hi uski maa uske baal katwane ko lekar uspar chillanne lagti hai. Rohan apne maa ko ek taraf hatate hue apne kamre mein chala jata hai aur darwaza band kar deta hai.
Thodi der baad Rohan ka phone phir se baj uth ta hai.
ROHAN: haan bol…… Acha……. sahi hai. Toh woh maan gayi? Kyun pehle toh mana kar rahi thi? Kya baat hai! lucky man.
Rohan phone bister mein patakte hue sochne lagta hai ki yeh ek dost tha jiska bhi uske tarah hi halaath tha. Issi ke bharose toh woh apne dil ko tasaali deke rakha tha ki woh hi sirf akela nahi hai jiski lagi padi hai. Par yeh kya? Ab toh iska mamala bhi fit ho gaya hai. Matlab ab woh ekdum akela hai.
Yeh dard bhi na… bachacha hai, nadaan hai, kaabu mein nahi aata hai….jab man kare chup ho jata hai aur jab man karein phudkna shuru kar deta hai.
Rohan ke pitaaji do hafto ke liye kaam se shahar se bahar gaye hue the. Toh Rohan ki maa Rohan ke kamre mein so rahi thi.
Raat ko theek teen baje, Rohan ke maa ko dusre kamre se gaane ki awaaz sunayi deti hai. Rohan ki maa bister se uthkar dusre kamre mein jaati hai aur dang raha jati hai. Rohan ek saadi ko sar par ghunghat ki tarah pehnke aur mooh par sindoor malkar naach raha tha….paas TV par R.D. Burman ka gana
Song : dhanno ki aankhon mein hai raat ka surma
aur chaand ka chumma ho o ...
dhanno ki aankhon mein hai raat ka surma
aur chaand ka chumma
sahar bhi tere bina raat lage
chhaala pade aag jaise chaand pe jo haath lage
Rohan ki maa usse rokne jaati hai toh Rohan uske haath pakad ke uske sath hi nachane lagta hai. Tabhi uski maa use ek thapad marke kehti hai “tu toh gaya kaam se. kal hi tujhe doctor ke paas lejaongi.” yeh kehti hui woh chali jaati hai. Rohan rone lagta hai. Aur gusse mein apni maa ki saari phaad deta hai.
dhanno ka gussa hai ek teer ka chumma
aur chaand ka chumma…..
Agle din subha Rohan ke nazar akhbaar mein ek khabar par jaati hai. ‘ PREMI NE PREMIKA KA KATTAL KAR DIYA’ Rohan Preeti ko phone karke aakhri baar milne ke liye ek jagah bulata hai. Thodi der baad woh wahan pahaunchta hai toh duur se hi Preeti ko dhekh leta hai. Uske pair mano achanak se zameen mein gad gaye. Preeti ki shakal dhekhe Rohan ko ek sukun milta hai. Woh saare baatein, woh ek ek pal Preeti ke saath mano sattar mm ke parde mein dhikhai ja rahi ho uske samne. Uske haath se chaaku gir jaata hai zameen par. Phir woh dheere dheere uske taraf badta hai.
PREETI: hi, kaise ho? Toh batao kyun bulaya tha?
Rohan chup chap khara rahata hai. phir thodi der baad woh bolta hai…
ROHAN: main tumhe maarne aaya tha.
PREETI: acha! Phir kya hua. Fat gayi tumhari? Pata hai Rohan tumhare ,mein kabhi gaand mein dum tha hi nahi. jigar hona chaiye. Maarne chale the mujhe! Choro…. acha batao kya baat hai kyun bulaya mujhe?
ROHAN: nahi khuch nahi. main chalta hun
PREETI: acha suno tum mujhe thoda aage tak chor doge….please
Rohan peeche gumta hai Preeti ki taraf . uske aankhein laal aur num hochuke the. Phir ek lambi saan bharte hue…dheere se bolta hai
ROHAN: Nahi!
Rohan ghar pahaunchta hai ki uski maa kehti hai ki shaam ko manowagainik(psychiatrist) ke doctor ke paas jaana hai. Rohan pehle toh mana karta hai, ki woh theek hai, par bad mein tayaar ho jata hai jaane ke liye. Uske sar mein maano jhanjhanat ho raha tha. Rohan nahane chala jata hai, phir se wohi baatein use yaad aane lagti hai aur woh gusalkhana(bathroom) ke deewar par aapna sar marta rahta hai aur phir rone lagta hai. Phir saamne sheeshe mein apni roni shakal dhekh kar has padta hai.
DOCTOR’S CLINIC
Rohan aur uski maa doctor se miltein hain. uski maa us doctor ko sab kuch bata ti hai. Doctor phir bolti hai,
“aise logon ko hum kehte hain ki woh BPD yani Borderline personality disorder se pidit hai. Jinke jiwan mein kabhi baahut bada hadsa hua ho. Bachpan mein khuch hua ho ya jaise aapko bete ke saath jo hua hai,aise kai aur cheeze. Aap jaise keh rahein hain ki aadhi raat ko saadi odke naachna, phir achanak se rona , achanak se hasna, yeh sab BPD ke shuruat ke lakhshan hai. Aise log dil mein chupe hue dard ko tarah tarah se nikalne ki koshish karte hain. Aapne achga kiya abhi leaayein hai. Main isse do chaar din baat karungi uske baad dhekhte hain. Philahal aap zara bahar jaiye main isse baat karti hun”
Rohan doctor ke shakal ko dhekh raha tha phir uski nazar shakal se thodi neeche ki taraf jata hai….
DOCTOR: size... 34 B
Rohan thoda haske bolta hai “acha hai”
DOCTOR: toh batao ?
ROHAN: kyun na hum kahin bahar mile, yahan dum ghut raha hai mera.
Doctor thoda sochke phir bolti hai….
DOCTOR: theek hai kal shaam ko mere ghar aa jana. Koi nahi hota uss samay. Mere pati bhi tour par gaye hain, itminan se tumhari kahani sunugi.
Rohan ke sharir mein ek sirhan si daur jaati hai, woh thoda muskurata hai. Ghar wapas aate hi uske dost use bahar lambi drive pe le jaate hain. raat ko tez raftar mein gaadi ke saath thandi thandi hawaiein bhi chal rahi thi, Rohan do ghut sharab peeta hai aur khirki ke bahar sar nikaale thandhi hawa ka mazaa le raha hota hai, tabhi gaari mein radio chalna shuru hota hai..…
Song : Dhadkan maheen dil mein jagati, ek hulchul si-
Kohra hata ke sooraj jalati, ek hulchul si-
Zinda hai ek hulchul si.
Had nazar ki, jahan talak hai
Ek bharam hai, wo jo dhanak hai
sach hai sach hai sach hai...
Jeene ki ek talab phir jagaye, ek hulchul si
Bujhti si saanso ko kash banaye, ek hulchul si
ROHAN KA DOST: yaar kya mausam hai. Ek ladki hoti toh bas. Oye! Kya bolte ho chale. Kal toh chuthi bhi hai. Aaj thoda masti kiya jaaye,
Rohan ke baaki dost bhi tayaar ho jate hain.aur phir gaari udhar mud jaati hai jahan har mard ki marz ki dawa milti hai.
Mehsoos kar le, ya dil ye pal.
Saanso se chhoo le, lamha ye bekal,
Bekal Bekal Bekal..
Ab Rohan 4 feet x 4 feet ke ek kamrein mein apna aakrosh ek aurat ke saath sawahawas karke nikaal raha tha
Kar le kar le ab kuch aisa kar le, kar le, kar le
Tu aaj an-gin roshan kirano se tan man, bhar le, bhar le
Macha le, jala le, dil mei……
Rohan ke saamne is dauran purane din ke woh raate jo usne Preeti ke saath guzaare the yaad aa jate hai,woh achanak uss aurat ke upar se hat jata hai aur kapde pehnke bhaagta hai. Raston mein gaariyon se bachte hue woh bhaag raha hota hai ki tabhi ek gaadi peeche se usse dhakkha marta hai. Gari se ek ladka aur ek ladki bahar nikalte hain…
LADKA: Preeti yeh to lagta hai….?
PREETI: are yeh toh Rohan hai… Rahul
RAHUL: Kya tumhara ex!? Oh fuck. Ek kaam karte hain isse haspatal le jaate hain
Rohan ko dono haspatal mein le jaate hain, tabhi Preeti Rohan ke jeb se uska mobile nikal kar uske ghar walo ko phone karne wali hoti hai ki usse Rohan ke phone par puraane messages padne ko mil jaati hai. Woh ghabra jati hain ki kahin police ko pata chal gaya toh. Aise mein bhi police accident case ke liye pooch tach karne wale the. Rahul ne Preeti ko kaha tum apna number bhi delete kar do aur jaldi se messages bhi delete kardo… iske phone se
30.1.2006
Preeti : hey baby! Aaj maine pallao banaya. Its yummy! Miss u L - DELETE
24.7.2006
Preeti: Miss u – DELETE
26.7.2006
Preeti: u r the man. With whom I wanna spent my rest of my life.luv u . muaaaaah! – DELETE
15. 9.2006
Preeti: muaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah! Luv u baby J - DELETE
28. 9 .2006
Preeti: yesterday night was gud. I felt like I m a part of u. muuuuah!- DELETE
Saare messages mitane ke baad yeh dono wahan se chup chap nikal jaate hain, Haspatal se Rohan ko khoon mein latpat chor ke.
SONG LYRICS COURTESY:
NAYAN TARSE- AMITABH BHATTACHARYA, DEV D
DHANO KI AANKHON MEIN : GULZAAR, KITAAB
EK HULCHUL SI: AMITABH BHATTACHARYA, DEV D
Nice twist. At times did feel Rohan's pain. Keep writing :-)
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ReplyDeleteYeah, nice twist..good lucid flow, ur getting better with ur hindi...also loved the way u intermingled songs in the story...and an open ending...gr8 work... :)
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ReplyDeletevery nicely written dada....got to read something new dis time...:) keep writing...u r getting better n better...:) loved d intermingling of songs with d story...u did it nicely...:) loved it throughout...:)
ReplyDeleteVery good man!!! superbly written... great twist in the end..
ReplyDeleteHeart felt.... Moved me as a reader... Must keep writing!!! You are good... :)
i like it...nicely written
ReplyDeleteA strong piece Bhaskar, I must say. Felt 'inside' for most part of it. Brilliant plot, loved the episodic flow n the twist towards the end..!! :))
ReplyDelete:)shukriya shukriya chhavi n charu :)
ReplyDeleten thanku arpu :)
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